this is extreeeemely un-engaging. maybe if you had done a close up of your face it would have been more interesting. but no one wants to watch a video of a kid standing in the dark in the middle of a parking lot reading news off his iphone (from a single angle). :/ sorry.
Hey Gokul, I think your idea is a good one, mocking the headlines is always fun (just look at The Onion, The Daily Show with Jon Stewart and the Colbert Report). But a script or rehearsed one-liners would have helped. You might have also considered throwing in quick images making fun of the news or getting a cameraperson to help us see you close-up. But I do really dig that you're trying comedy. It's a side we don't see much in your writing. How can we get you to try out humor more in your work?
DO SOMETHING WITH YOUR CAMERA.
ReplyDeletethis is extreeeemely un-engaging. maybe if you had done a close up of your face it would have been more interesting. but no one wants to watch a video of a kid standing in the dark in the middle of a parking lot reading news off his iphone (from a single angle). :/ sorry.
Hey Gokul, I think your idea is a good one, mocking the headlines is always fun (just look at The Onion, The Daily Show with Jon Stewart and the Colbert Report). But a script or rehearsed one-liners would have helped. You might have also considered throwing in quick images making fun of the news or getting a cameraperson to help us see you close-up. But I do really dig that you're trying comedy. It's a side we don't see much in your writing. How can we get you to try out humor more in your work?
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